Well done for writing a recount about some of your holiday in Australia. It sounds like you did some really fun things. I was impressed with the way you worked on this independently Eamon. Your writing is getting better and better. Your next step is to work on using different kinds of sentences to make your writing interesting and to use some more describing words. I look forward to seeing you do this in term two.
I liked that you described some of the water slides and the jet ski stunts sound amazing!
Well done for writing a recount about some of your holiday in Australia. It sounds like you did some really fun things. I was impressed with the way you worked on this independently Eamon. Your writing is getting better and better. Your next step is to work on using different kinds of sentences to make your writing interesting and to use some more describing words. I look forward to seeing you do this in term two.
ReplyDeleteI liked that you described some of the water slides and the jet ski stunts sound amazing!
Great work Eamon.