My Planet writing

Create and Describe Your Own Planet -

Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my writing interesting
and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing interesting
and engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words to include in my
writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are
writing a descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary
planet. You aim is to convince people to move to your planet. You
want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is
like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from
the Avatar movie. Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to
make it successful and look at how to plan our work. Then you will
plan your work and check with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proofread
(check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense? do
you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and
fill in your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

MY WRITING

Earth 2.0 is located nōta/north of our Oort Cloud it is like Earth but
it is bigger but it has less people than Earth it has 3 million 465
thousand and 254 .earth 2.0 has two moons and one sun there is ore
underground it has been used by the natives for weapons and armor.

The biomes are vast deserts and plains, there are towering cities and
friendly people. There are massive markets that sell lots of things.
The forests and jungles house lots of life the jungles have massive
trees and lakes. Sometimes you can find ruins of temples made by the natives. They can hold weapons, armor and artifacts. It looks like earth from above.

The way to get there is by spaceship you will need to be
whakakōpaka/frozen. It will take 25’365 tau aho /light years to get
there. There are different types of people on this planet. There are
humans and aliens. Some aliens have four legs or four arms some
even have no arms or legs and the humans are like us.